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Revealed by =kittie-chan:iconkittie-chan:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Sociopolitical > Open


I've ended my play
Came into the open
Revealed my secret.

Wish i would have stayed
To continue my play.
The audience members
Are different than they appear.

Its better to be
A solitary crab
Safe in my shell.
But now that i moved out
I can never go back again.
©2004-2008 =kittie-chan
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Submitted: November 2, 2004
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This is BLEAK continued. Both poems are basically on school life. They both express how i generally feel about school, and my part in the school.

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*tkay:icontkay: Nov 2, 2004, 8:32:18 AM
I like it, i also like how you had 3 lines 4 lines then 5 lines, it kinda gives the illusion of opening up.

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Wallets, keys, rings, hopes and dreams.
We've lost them all.
=kittie-chan:iconkittie-chan: Nov 2, 2004, 8:45:36 AM
Thanx. Actually, I didn't notice the lines thing. It was subconcious i guess. ^^

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DEATH
*tkay:icontkay: Nov 2, 2004, 1:55:03 PM
i think it's neat <3 it just seems... um... symbolic? yep it's all cool and symbolic that way (even if it wasn't on purpose :P)

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Wallets, keys, rings, hopes and dreams.
We've lost them all.
=kittie-chan:iconkittie-chan: Nov 4, 2004, 2:45:24 PM
Actually, i realized something. i do that with a couple of my poems. and now that u pointed it out, i check to see if i did do it. its kinda funny, don't u think?

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DEATH
~chambered-nautilus:iconchambered-nautilus: Feb 14, 2005, 7:28:24 PM
very welll written... i like it... =D

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"Life may not be the party we hoped for,
But while we are here, we might as well dance....."
=kittie-chan:iconkittie-chan: Feb 16, 2005, 1:34:35 PM
thanx. i like ur avatar

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the earth is a purgatory and we seak to go to hell or heaven or to be reincarnated
(no, i'm not catholic)

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~Yasar:iconYasar: Mar 20, 2005, 5:54:53 AM
Yeah it was decent, I liked the inner meaning.

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I get a kick out of being an outsider constantly. It allows me to be creative. I don't like anything in the mainstream and they don't like me. --Bill Hicks
=kittie-chan:iconkittie-chan: Mar 20, 2005, 4:54:31 PM
thanx

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the pencil fell, just as my hopes did. thanx for the dissapointment. its all i needed with my hear as fragile as it is. and theres no need to worry, i don't hate you. why, i still love you.

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~nalster73:iconnalster73: Apr 10, 2005, 10:13:21 AM
we are all someone else when we are at school... atleast in my case, my shell was so real it became who i was for a long time

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Some men see things as they are and say why?... I dream of things that never were and say why not?
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